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    dots Submission Name: Farseerdots
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    Author: Draumrkopa
    ASL Info:    23/F/buy da coffee shop
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 225/93/22
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
    Total Views: 906
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1700



    Description:
       Just a flow of thoughts I wrote a few years ago. (While I was reading the Farseer books =P)


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    -I'm holding on to my last breath-
    The result being
    A hollow feeling in my chest.
    The need to search for a worthy
    Cause/reason/excuse.
    To let it out
    Possibly,
    Fly, to places unknown.
    Under all these thoughts,
    Hides deeper feeling.
    The want of freedom
    The Need.
    Release of tension,
    Let go of that stress.
    Relaxation,
    To just sit with someone in complete silence,
    With ease.
    Let this breath out
    -Do I dare let it out?-
    Irrelevant, the rest of the world
    As I sit, unseen
    And by reflex, observe.
    Sometimes it's unsettling
    How much they miss,
    How much more I see
    By simply taking the time to observe.
    I can see the look in that boys face,
    How he stares at her,
    Obviously infatuated
    And she continues on, oblivious.
    I see the girl, singing softly
    On the swing next to me,
    Reminding me so much of myself.
    I see a group of boys,
    That have started up a game of football
    And thoughts of my brothers find life yet again.
    The sun is setting already
    As it makes it's way closer and closer to the horizon,
    I notice a solitary figure
    Walking toward me,
    In shadow
    Unidentifiable.
    I try to peer closer
    Stopped up by my curiosity,
    For I can feel
    That I am this figure's
    'Final Destination'
    As it comes closer,
    A thousand thoughts flash through my mind
    And for reasons unknown,
    For this figure,
    -I dare to breathe my last breath-




    Submitted on 2012-06-30 15:43:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    It does not tell a story. It is just an account of a story. I do not want to see how you see yourself.

    I think your language in z195464 is abundantly weak. Have some self respect even in your daydreams. Learn to frame an experience rather than modify it's picture.

    "Just a flow of thoughts I wrote a few years ago."
    It does not flow at all. Your "thoughts" are unrelated to one another.

    A fifteen year old could of written what you have written. What are we looking at here Rogue? Are you a narcissist? The writing should be unlisted.

    How dare you spoil your life! Men have to admit when they are wrong. Now prove I am wrong about you! Quit rejecting my love :(

    | Posted on 2012-07-01 00:00:00 | by stellartotem | [ Reply to This ]


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