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    dots Submission Name: What?dots
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    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 41/64/76
    Words: 237
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Can you fall toward me?


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    Can you fall toward me?

    Turn the angle of the lights to be more brilliant?

    Fall upon the fictional perspective of me?

    By selling all the stars one by one?

    Letting your name feel free to see the
    comical designations of being,
    allowing the free to become the means
    and the condemned to be the percussionists.

    The cradle rocks both ways so that the ocean
    doesnít see, it just feels the need to be.

    Donít just destroy this baptized present,
    let itís risk fall upon the shoulders of all.
    Capture that attention you crave to see,
    and change their philosophy for the better of being.

    Donít ask, is this the way?

    Can reality verge upon this direction?

    Listen to your being, your consciousness will tell you the way, there is a connection ďto allĒ in there somewhere.

    This key isnít lost, itís just unseen by the webbing formed in your mind, by societal junk to keep you weak and hidden away.

    If you know yourself, you know the world, if you know the world, you can find the way. Not our way, or their way, but your way. We all belong to the stars of fatal destiny.

    Then we ask....if we belong to the stars of fatal destiny does it make it our way, their way or your way?




    Submitted on 2012-07-02 22:21:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Caution aerie altruism allegorical. Metaphysical mystique speaks clearly to the corporeally preternatural but not all will listen. When I think of this in relation to the 7 billion or so of us there are I could have a hysterical delirium. So I'm like "What?" I may consider all but I'm pretty sure I'm no such perceptive up entity. So I'm like "What?" I feel this is a very apt title!! So like get down, feel your groove, right???

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2012-07-02 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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