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    dots Submission Name: (Whispers)dots

    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 41/64/76
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Run away

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    Itís a struggle to be
    (Run away)

    Itís a struggle to see
    (Turn away)

    Let the darkness feed your prey
    (With a solemn beating)

    Tender kindness taken away
    (Not for you)

    Turning feelings into feedings
    (Smothering sexual desire)

    Hurting more
    (Solemn beating)

    Caressing less
    (Left alone)

    Crossing closely to mania
    (Leaving the empty part)

    Reminiscing of the past
    (Thereís so much inconsistency)

    (Itís a struggle to be)
    Regret is unprovoked

    (Itís a struggle to see)
    Kindness looking away

    Quickly looking to the sky
    (Youíre hanging softly now)

    Fumbling for the clouds
    (Youíre back into your mind)

    Now open your eyes

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      I love the idea!
    | Posted on 2012-10-28 00:00:00 | by Iram | [ Reply to This ]

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