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    dots Submission Name: Medicine Maniadots

    Author: oixi
    ASL Info:    50/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 196/243/100
    Words: 284
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       A rhyming verse regarding our over medicated society. Let me know what you think.

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    dotsMedicine Maniadots

    We have pills to make us sleepy
    And pills to keep us awake.
    Drugs to sooth us when weepy
    And a placebo is simply a fake.

    There is pharma for all kinds of ills,
    Even drugs that treat other drugs.
    We bombard our bodies with pills,
    Devolving to over-dosed slugs.

    We make drug companies quite rich
    As our health declines to poor.
    And they couldnft give a stitch,
    Since none look for a cure.

    Cancer is still a widespread sin
    And diabetes so much more.
    Plenty of meds to battle and win,
    But nothing to win the war.

    The day a drug firm makes a med
    That ends a disease for all time,
    Is when their CEO goes off his head
    And commits a Marketing Crime.

    So through all suffering from bad to worse,
    One fact we must never forget.
    Pharmaceuticals are a business first,
    Who profit without regret.

    Remember when you take a pill for that,
    Another for the other, and a 3rd to help this.
    There was a time when home cures did combat
    Against our ills nearly as well with hardly a miss.

    Now someone makes a convenient pill
    And home remedies are forgot.
    Of course it wonft cure what makes you ill,
    But it really helps a lot.

    Medicine mania makes our modern day.
    We take meds that make us sick and others that will treat
    The condition, or so our Doctors say.
    Why in our healthcare is there no med that will cure complete?

    Don't wonder too much about it, as this may give you a headache.
    For which there are several pills available, even some prescription meds.

    Submitted on 2012-07-05 21:57:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I was quite amused reading this. I must admit I'm a pill popper. I currently take a multivitamin, a cranberry pill which promotes a healthy bladder, and an herbal energy pill. I'm also researching at the moment an omega3 supplement but have yet to decide which one to go with.

    In regards to the write itself, it read so well up until the last two stanzas. The second to last stanza comes across extremely forced to complete a rhyme, while the other doesn't rhyme at all. Aside from that I enjoyed reading this with my little quirky all too knowing smile upon my face
    | Posted on 2012-09-12 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]

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