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    dots Submission Name: "The Death Of A Flower"dots
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    Author: Ron Cole
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    dots"The Death Of A Flower"dots
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    Innocence
    is such a precious and lovely flower,
    so easily lost,
    and
    never
    to be regained;

    in its' wake,
    lesser forces prevail,
    all having greater might
    and
    authority,
    but none that can claim
    charity,
    purity,
    and a oneness
    in the sight of
    God...


    Ron Cole
    July 2012




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      I disagree.

    If innocence were defined as obliviousness as to the consequences of one's actions, I imagine that most people could claim, albeit loosely, to be innocent.
    However, if innocence were defined as the cleanliness of the soul - purity without intention to damage, couldn't this be won through learning selflessness?

    I don't think it's a matter of innocence being feigned or hopelessly lost, but the notion of it that determines its value.

    Sometimes, it's as though we treasure ignorance.
    | Posted on 2016-05-16 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      Not much I can add Ron, apart from the flow and expresion is very good indeed......and the inclusion of the term 'innocence' adds real depth and meaning to the piece.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2012-07-21 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      As usual, amazing, love it. Purity is something so rare these days... wonderful write, perfect flow.
    | Posted on 2012-07-13 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]
      'Tho we are all born into this world innocent, some will lose it earlier. To pain of lost loved ones, phisical abuse or the mental strain of day to day living. This was a poetic look at the loss of a childs innocense., thank you RON for sharing.
    | Posted on 2012-07-09 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful!

    I especially like the idea that innocence is a oneness with god...
    and although a loss of innocence isnt a complete death, it is a death of sorts, isnt it?

    I'm so happy to read a new poem from you, Ron!
    Thanks for sharing!
    | Posted on 2012-07-08 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      Very smooth piece, nicely written, captured the content from the first line.

    Nice write!

    Marco
    | Posted on 2012-07-08 00:00:00 | by Latin King | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Ron, I see you are still writting wonderful poetry. I've still not written anything new, not sure why? I come in and read others
    work. I loved this one and I really liked the opening.

    Innocence can never be regained but then we who get out and live life all change and grow. Innocence is not a bad thing to loose. :) Take care and enjoy your writting always... Desi
    | Posted on 2012-07-08 00:00:00 | by Desi | [ Reply to This ]
      "all having greater might
    and
    authority,
    but none that can claim,
    charity,
    purity,....."


    really like those lines

    you are so smooth with your wording...always enjoy reading you..

    one slight glitch..."its'"

    should be "its"

    but a very good poem...and yes, innocence is so easily lost...that is a truth.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-07-06 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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