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    dots Submission Name: grandfather clockdots
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    Author: sweet sorenity
    ASL Info:    24/f/ Ga
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 211/221/58
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsgrandfather clockdots
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    Hollow house. low light.
    late night
    fan blairing
    ghosts swareing at the sighn of life....
    Sweet silence or eary screams in my head...
    . Modle cars and broken guitars
    canvas smeared with ashes and tears
    we will privail or just become frail rusty shells of what we use to be.... Alas a glimps of hope the street light flickers and I see your face shineing down on me
    Tick tock tick tock
    I've seemed to misplace the hands for the clock time stops in this moment
    Forever no but at least for a moment I feel nothing but your loveing embrase
    A mear instant from now you will dissapear
    But I'll pick of the pieces and continue on




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