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haiku


Author: joeyalphabet
ASL Info:    50/not likely/somewhere..
Elite Ratio:    3.75 - 2212 /2241 /475
Words: 16
Class/Type: Poetry /Death
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haiku



The dead still speak through
The winds, the sun, morning dew
Still speak to our hearts




Submitted on 2012-07-11 17:36:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like it. Don't know about the last line though. I think you could have done better there...
| Posted on 2012-07-13 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
  what a lovely haiku...well done...nice theme put in to the nature guise...

i love the brevity of haiku...yet how much is contained in so few lines...

and i really do think that they speak to us...in many ways..especially the three you mention in this poem.


jacob
| Posted on 2012-07-11 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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