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    dots Submission Name: haikudots
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    Author: joeyalphabet
    ASL Info:    50/not likely/somewhere..
    Elite Ratio:    3.75 - 2212/2241/475
    Words: 16
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotshaikudots
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    The dead still speak through
    The winds, the sun, morning dew
    Still speak to our hearts




    Submitted on 2012-07-11 17:36:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it. Don't know about the last line though. I think you could have done better there...
    | Posted on 2012-07-13 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      what a lovely haiku...well done...nice theme put in to the nature guise...

    i love the brevity of haiku...yet how much is contained in so few lines...

    and i really do think that they speak to us...in many ways..especially the three you mention in this poem.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-07-11 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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