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    dots Submission Name: wanted: new frienddots
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    Author: Mud
    ASL Info:    18/f/India
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 55/98/57
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotswanted: new frienddots
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    he must be called angus, he must be a cyclops. he must not be fundamentalist. he should be okay with living under beds and must enjoy eating crumbs. angus can have some hobbies too, he can make paper boats if he wants, or he can read science fiction. he can have a pet if he wants but i would prefer he didn't leave the bones under the bed.




    Submitted on 2012-07-12 13:47:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Haha! I like it. Like Jacob I especially liked the last part. Dunno why but I found that line about the bones quite funny. I like the sarcasm in this piece. I kinda use sarcasm a lot in my own pieces. Check some out, if you've got the time, I think you'd like them...
    | Posted on 2012-07-13 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      clever...yes, don't leave the bones under the bed....paper boats and science fiction...

    and as long as he is fiction...he can be friend...something not real can't hurt me.

    i remember as a kid dreaming about monsters under the bed...maybe if i looked, there would only have been "bones" there.

    the monsters all dead.

    i don't enjoy eating crumbs...but sometimes i have to resort to that to survive....

    does that count? can i answer the ad?


    :)

    enjoyed this creative little piece

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-07-13 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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