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    Author: isabella
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    1.

    they found the woman yesterday. she was some ways down river. (took her almost a week to get there).

    makes me think that you never know.
    you just never know.

    makes me hope that God doesn't think i am finished yet.
    'cause i sure as hell don't feel done.

    2.

    the other night, paigy comes stomping out of the bedroom in a
    'do-ya-hear-me-yet' kinda way. liv is on the couch with a bloody nose. i'm sitting next to liv, keeping her company. buh is next to me, zonked out. anyways, paigy comes to buh, lays her head
    on his belly, says: you sleepin' boy?

    3.

    about three hours before the stars come out, mr. majestic takes a cruise. he's a white bellied all american boy. stars. stripes. (spangled all over).

    4.

    god, you look like you're 21 again. will ya look at that face?

    i light up when i think of riding.
    every last moment that i've ever had
    sits with me still.

    5.

    that sound.
    that soulful sound of bird and bike and breaking bread.

    it's an ache.

    6.

    and i think of you.





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      I've sorely missed reading your writing. I think I came back here because (1) I finally remembered it on a blue-ish day of nothingness [I have too many lately], and (2) I wanted to try to write again. Then I read you, and think, ahhhhh I could never be that good anyway. You have sunshine in your words, and all mine ever conveyed was storms.

    I envy the dead mermaid... floating a week down, away from interfering hands... blue faced as the sea.
    | Posted on 2014-05-11 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      i like how you often write...conversational, almost confessional, diary in a way...yet so beautifully poetic with your lines and imagery...

    this all connects somehow...yes, "it's an ache/ and i think of you."

    you write from the gut..nothing phony, nothing contrived...never for show...but your words tug the heart.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-07-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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