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    dots Submission Name: Hopedots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.08 - 366/364/154
    Words: 15
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 560
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       just wrote this a few seconds ago. i havent posted here in a long while...


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    dotsHopedots
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    The sun has shattered the storm-
    It roots in the stratum of my skin




    Submitted on 2012-07-15 15:59:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The alliteration is delightful. In a short piece like this you accomplish the straightforward truth of one message that needs no embellishments.
    | Posted on 2015-11-04 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      The sun has shattered the storm-
    It roots in the stratum of my skin

    splintering the clouds like broken bowls
    swirling like a world that's learned to spin
    | Posted on 2012-07-15 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like that image of the sun shattering the storm...my life is a storm and suddenly there is a ray of hope.


    and it takes root...deeper than the surface...hope is more than skin deep!


    i really like short pieces like this...gives a litte line and we run with it...like an excited bass...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-07-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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