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    dots Submission Name: Playing Cardsdots
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    Author: disturbedx1000
    ASL Info:    28/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 204/326/124
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 554
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    Description:
       Pretty easy to figure out, an surprise not a dark poem, well not completely, how unusual of me lol. I have a feeling some people might not understand #4, some will but in case some don't I'll explain. I include myself with #3. Same goes for #5 an 6.


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    dotsPlaying Cardsdots
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    An Ace up my sleves,
    2 Parents never there..
    3 best friends,
    4 lives to share..
    5 times I've snapped,
    6 people hurt..
    7 days a week,
    8 hours of sleep..
    9 broken bones,
    10 emergency rooms..
    Jack shit for help,
    Queen in my heart..
    An I.. I am my own King




    Submitted on 2012-07-15 23:28:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Something about this post reminds me of Seger's observation of how to maximize returns on minimal risk while still avoiding ties that bind. Of course, the song implies that this is was the subject's chosen and inescapable way of life. Your post suggests the cards played you. Interesting.

    Still the Same - Bob Seger

    You always won everytime you placed a bet
    You're still damn good
    No one's gotten to you yet
    Everytime they were sure they had you caught
    You were quicker than they thought
    You'd just turn your back and walk
    You always said
    The cards would never do you wrong
    The trick you said
    was never play the game too long
    A gambler's share
    The only risk that you would take
    the only loss you could forsake
    The only bluff you couldn't fake

    And you're still the same
    I caught up with you yesterday
    Moving game to game
    No one standing in your way
    Turning on the charm
    Long enough to get you by
    You're still the same
    You still aim high

    There you stood
    Everybody watched you play
    I just turned and walked away
    I had nothing left to say
    'Cause you're still the same
    You're s are still the same
    Moving game to game
    Some things never change
    You're still the same
    | Posted on 2012-07-16 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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