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    dots Submission Name: For Michaeldots

    Author: WolfStar
    ASL Info:    26/F/California
    Elite Ratio:    6.85 - 119/130/46
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This is the first serious poem I've written in a long while. Thoughts appreciated.

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    dotsFor Michaeldots

    We walked alone so long a time,
    together on the lonely rock,
    parallel and never meeting,
    the crossing never come.
    Lives were passed and battles won;
    he learned to build on sifting sands
    and I to dance on cloud and stone alike;
    we glanced in recognition
    but never thought to touch.

    And there upon a misty dawn
    I found a cliff that struck the sea
    in a place more north than north was known,
    and he the same as me.
    From that twin but separate height
    we looked upon the edge of earth,
    and thought of what came after loss
    as promise sounded on the rock.

    We leapt as children trust the sky,
    as wise men know the wind.
    Blue-grey sea took us eagerly
    and forever flashed to stillness.
    His hand met mine in the silent dark;
    my lips found his amid the blue,
    warm strangers, at once familiar,
    entangled in the depths
    of desires old and young.

    And in that expanse of endless sea
    were we borne from all we knew,
    free from those forgotten dooms;
    no east or south or burning west,
    neither cloud nor rock nor brutal sand,
    caught in delights which earth denied
    and we once met made one.

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      There are some great lines in here and to get here, truly emotional piece, I think its quite an excellent poem.

    "Promise sounded on a rock" I think is better. I love this line, it could be anything. For me, its those words never came accross to actions, promises that left us hanging. Well' just my thoughts.

    I like the pictures this one brought to me.
    Thanks for sharing,

    | Posted on 2012-09-25 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]

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