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    dots Submission Name: Upon My Darkest Hourdots
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    Author: charmedidentity
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    6.9 - 864/897/406
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Let this hour take me not to my darkest place,
    But if it does, I shall accept this challenge with grace.


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    dotsUpon My Darkest Hourdots
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    Upon my darkest hour, I gaze into your eyes
    And in that briefest second of connection
    I release the tension, of all that I despise.

    I am strong in my depleting strength
    I am sane in my deteriorating state
    I am soulful in my defective spirit
    I am everything in a world of nothing.

    Upon my troubled thoughts, I gaze into the sky
    And in that flash of peace, I see the stars align
    Until the clouds amass, the truth deforms into a lie.

    I am worried in my concrete intellect
    I am wrecked in my muscled presence
    I am worthless in my valued traditions
    I am nothing in a world of everything.

    Upon my time of desperation, I gaze inside of me
    And in that meditative journey, of seeking solace,
    I release the energy that had me breathing heavily.





    Submitted on 2012-07-16 13:48:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a world of paradoxes and oxymorons---

    i am one myself i think...i relate.

    reminds me of alanis morrisette...

    "i'm brave, but i'm chicken shit"

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-07-16 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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