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Alone


Author: caldewith
ASL Info:    23/male/jupiter
Elite Ratio:    1.75 - 3 /5 /9
Words: 89
Class/Type: Misc /Comedy
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Alone



I don't feel him anymore
Not like the times before
When he cheeted on me
When maybe unfaithfullness
Was the means by whitch we loved eachother
He with his secrets and I with my ignorence.

Now what has become of us
We fear each other
We're more sad than happy!!!
And I fear loosing him....
Is that bad?

And now I walk and sleep alone
Wonder every night
Will he be with me the next morning
Or like yesterday? Will he want to go home
Alone......




Submitted on 2012-07-16 17:31:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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