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    Author: ares_nuke_1
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 106/151/76
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       sorry for the long break between poems...this one is about stepping into the society for the first time after being isolated for so long...i hope you all enjoy.


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    dotsOrphan no moredots
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    We've been gone for so long
    treading through the darkness
    no home to which we belong
    trapped forever in loneliness

    shove it all aside we must
    find renewed faith in others
    but whom should we trust
    without fathers and mothers

    reentering this world anew
    we have found peace
    with newly found faith in you
    with the rising sun the darkness has ceased




    Submitted on 2012-07-18 04:35:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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