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    Author: isabella
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    (while the sun is out, while i shine, hold my hand.
    i want to tell you somethingnothingeverything,
    all at once, while there is still color);





    but i don't.

    i make snow motions instead,
    with six-year-old wings, alone on a morning hill.
    i know love is much larger than i'll ever be;
    the universe told me so.




    Submitted on 2012-07-19 08:06:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love your poems. Today I'm filled with a feeling I haven't had in a while. MAybe it comes from working thirteen hour days and finally having a break. Maybe it comes from too much bacon. But I feel like as whole a lot of the poem I love, like yours, exist in a world where there is no judgement. No literary criticism. And when they're allowed to exist they are indeed beautiful, little moment between child and mother or a face and a field of grass. I like this because it reminds me of being young. I like somethingnothingeverything because it covers it all. in ways real words cannot and, so, fuck everyone. Life is okay sometimes maybe I don't know.
    | Posted on 2013-09-17 00:00:00 | by lukewarm | [ Reply to This ]
      exquisite piece....

    "somethingnothingeverything". it's really all one concept, all one "thing"....

    it makes me think of being with a very special person to me....and wanting to tell him everything i feel, but also wanting to tell him nothing at all, because he already knows....

    the sun will melt those snow angels, leaving just a puddle....
    | Posted on 2012-08-05 00:00:00 | by rubie | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem.. .

    In college, I took an English Lit class and we resd this one poem ,I wish I could remember the name and the author , but
    it was written with a similar style. .. the author was speaking about Jesus being beautiful and he said something like this:

    Jesusisbeautiful a ndheroomed t h e earth. ..

    That's what your poem reminds me of.
    Thanks for sharing :-)
    | Posted on 2012-07-27 00:00:00 | by dannyshyboy | [ Reply to This ]
      i think sometimes explanations aren't needed or wanted...we should just "BE" with each other...

    actions express much more than words....

    you make me feel like a snow angel..yes, i like that.

    i want to tell you everything...but then that would ruin it really..i would no longer be a mystery...but if i tell you nothing, you won't trust me.. so i will tell you something, but not in words..

    you don't need to hear me...just feel me...and feel the love i have for you....
    at least, while the color lasts...

    love seems so ephemeral these days...lasts for a while...maybe a long while, maybe a short while...but just a while.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-07-19 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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