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A Lost Paradise


Author: charmedidentity
ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
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Words: 178
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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It is but a deserted island that looses its heart to a concquerer of land who's only purpose is to satisfy its own desires.


A Lost Paradise



Your land is empty of vessels
for which I
must conquer it all.
Without this help of mine,
your island’s heart
will only fall.
My wicked ways does no harm,
even when I do
make you feel small.
Shrivel not into your hidden cave,
for you will always be
my baby doll.

Your smooth
uncharted curves
I only wish to mark as mine.
With my coarse callous hands,
I guarantee your virtue
will be fine.
Fear not my future plans
to turn your rawness
a cosmopolitan design.
For at the end of this journey,
your deserted heart
will be divine.

Your paradise is lost
in this horrendous amount
of solid concrete.
As centuries do pass,
the love we once shared
has buried its passionate heat.
This ambition of mine
shattered as I walk alone
on this crowded street.
Remembering the moment
I first caught sight of you
looking loving and sweet.




Submitted on 2012-07-19 13:16:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The poem was a bit confusing. I'm not sure if I'm misinterpreting but the structure seemed a bit awkward and I was unsure as to the meaning.

The third stanza seemed to deviate away from the meaning of the first two. At first the voice of the poem seemed to come from a suitor in pursuit of an innocent lover but then the third stanza just went off to another path.

Were you attempting to connect the chase and the consequences of giving in?

I'm a big fan of your writing but I was just confused. It makes me feel like I'm not doing a good enough job at reading and interpreting.
| Posted on 2012-07-19 00:00:00 | by Katrinagolden | [ Reply to This ]


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