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    dots Submission Name: Lost in Translationdots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Love I guess!


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    dotsLost in Translationdots
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    If only I had written
    A thousand pieces
    Just for her eyes,
    Or painted art
    Masterpieces
    Depicting her sighs
    Or maybe a million
    Snapshots
    That would't lie
    To you because
    I'm lost in
    Translation
    In a moment
    When I could
    Have had her
    But now
    It's too late
    To even
    Mention.




    Submitted on 2012-07-20 15:07:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lost love for me is best expressed in words and that's when you try to find the right words and end up with just simple ones with so much emotions...
    I liked the simplicity in this poem and its honesty.

    I really enjoyed this..thanks for sharing..
    jen
    | Posted on 2012-08-25 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      Short sweet and to the point

    lost love is such a bittersweet thing in life but such is life I guess and there is nothing better to release emotion then written word
    | Posted on 2012-08-14 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      Since this is a short poem, I wont go into explicit detail. But I'll share with you some thoughts :)

    I like how you compare your "love" with that of art. Art has always been a beautiful medium in expression. To paint the sky with emerald fires, to wash the waves with liquid colors, to dream upon a lifeless mass...expression in any form is wonderful, but the visual aspect of Art enhances it to a larger degree.

    I like how this states "Lost in Translation" considering any old text you read most likely has had that done to it. So history is lost through multitudes of languages and love is almost the same way. Through each hand it passes a bit of it drifts away, but once you find that person, they fill up your empty spaces.

    Though this ends on a somewhat sad note. It still doesn't take away the meaning. I really have enjoyed reading this. Thank you
    | Posted on 2012-07-24 00:00:00 | by ARoseyTint | [ Reply to This ]


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