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    dots Submission Name: Menacing Greydots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMenacing Greydots
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    Breathe the chunky air
    Fill your tattered lungs
    With peppered red
    Watch as gloom gathers day
    and light fades away

    A single ray
    of blue on grey
    Malingers in opaque eyes
    The opiate of sunset
    Slides you into a
    Scar stacked night
    Brittle as baked bone
    There is a crunch in
    Your step

    Call the watchman
    Guard the cheese
    They are not coming
    They are already here





    Submitted on 2012-07-20 23:10:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Man, it's good to see you posting again. I'm much entertained here, also great pic.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2012-07-24 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      "I am Catman!" said the lone commando who held off the horde that slithered through the night like a crazed minute army of cheddar assassins determined to lay waste cat-astrophically.
    | Posted on 2012-07-21 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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