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    dots Submission Name: Aurora(For the 70 and for the hundreds and for us)dots
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    Author: joeyalphabet
    ASL Info:    50/not likely/somewhere..
    Elite Ratio:    3.75 - 2212/2241/475
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsAurora(For the 70 and for the hundreds and for us)dots
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    They fell at the line where Bane exclaims
    “Behold, the instrument of your liberation!”

    Their screams drowned out
    “Why does he wear the mask?”

    They died at the line
    “I swore to them that I would protect you, and I haven't.”

    The wounded lay in pain, listening to
    “Why didn't you just kill me?”

    The blood ran down the stairs to
    “This city needs me.”

    They sobbed, shivered, and hugged each other to
    “What if he doesn't exist any more?”




    Submitted on 2012-07-21 10:21:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, this is a heavy piece about such a tragedy...

    where is that superhero to stop tragedies like this...he or she has let us down...

    the city cannot sleep.

    i like the use of quotes...it was as if you wrote two poems in one....

    a narration...and then a guilted conscience...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-07-22 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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