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poor example of Haiku?


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poor example of Haiku?



Ref: http://www.eliteskills.com/poetry/Haiku.php

Given the prescribed structure ...

* 3 Lines
* Lines 1,2,3 have 5,7,5 syllables respectively.
* Unrhymed

... the example provided is AWFUL.

a) It has four lines
b) Line 1 - 3 syllables
Line 2 - 4 syllables
Line 3 - 5 syllables
Line 4 - 2 syllables
c) A total of 14 syllables (not 17 as described above)!




Submitted on 2012-07-22 13:39:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It was an unfortunate example to cite; but it was not a poor example of Haiku.
Basho composed haiku in Japanese, and the syllables (onji) fit the form in that language; but do not in English.
| Posted on 2012-07-22 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]


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