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    dots Submission Name: poor example of Haiku?dots
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    dotspoor example of Haiku?dots
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    Ref: http://www.eliteskills.com/poetry/Haiku.php

    Given the prescribed structure ...

    * 3 Lines
    * Lines 1,2,3 have 5,7,5 syllables respectively.
    * Unrhymed

    ... the example provided is AWFUL.

    a) It has four lines
    b) Line 1 - 3 syllables
    Line 2 - 4 syllables
    Line 3 - 5 syllables
    Line 4 - 2 syllables
    c) A total of 14 syllables (not 17 as described above)!




    Submitted on 2012-07-22 13:39:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It was an unfortunate example to cite; but it was not a poor example of Haiku.
    Basho composed haiku in Japanese, and the syllables (onji) fit the form in that language; but do not in English.
    | Posted on 2012-07-22 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]


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