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    dots Submission Name: Thoughts on Sartredots

    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 136/243/156
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThoughts on Sartredots

    And I am trapped, with no way out
    Of my mirror, itís crippled into my face Ė
    Just take the shard and slide it lightly
    my neck and wrists.
    Watch how the life lines
    Pulse into the summer wind that only issued
    One drop to hit the darkened figure
    Of an age-old sage, he knew much more
    And didnít tell, because though knowing one
    And not knowing the other,
    Discerning differences into the night:
    The tragic dissonance of an acquired freedom.

    Submitted on 2012-07-22 15:47:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the material (I think) but found the structure to be a but taxing. There should be a way to smooth this out quite a bit. If Dale doesn't like Sartre and would rather avoid such thoughts judiciously, it might be an aversion to things dry.
    | Posted on 2012-07-26 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this one I just do not get the Sartre reference. I suppose that is partly because I do not understand why anyone would want to have thoughts on Sartre.
    | Posted on 2012-07-22 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]

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