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    dots Submission Name: Angry Ghostsdots
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    Author: ruejacobs
    ASL Info:    39/feminazi/Gehenna
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 619/473/167
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       c. by ruejacobs 7/22/2012


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    dotsAngry Ghostsdots
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    I rode the arc of the scimitar moon
    I balanced the blade from the tips of my fingers
    And I severed artery and tendon
    I bit through the flesh of the beast
    I swallowed it whole
    I sang the hymns and worshipped at the shrine
    And still those temples fall into dust
    Rise up into still air and become clouds
    No one said I was easy
    And no one said you were hard
    But we’ll take it on faith, my love
    And what rises on your horizon
    Might be the maw of something ancient
    It looks angry from here




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      I liked the ancient fury emanating from this. This comes from a time when men were still men and women were glad of it. :D
    | Posted on 2016-10-21 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      as i read this again, it becomes one of the most lucid and obtainable pieces i've read for a while. you capture the essence of looking into the past, and the struggle of overcoming, with the duty it takes to do so in a relationship, and that's quite an accomplishment to do so in such an eloquent fashion. this show's a very firm grasp of poetic device, and an excellent use of semantics. it's something i'll read over many times.
    | Posted on 2012-07-23 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      It is effective poetry because it reminded me of two couples that it might have been about (if they wrote it instead of you, kinda?)

    I have read these metaphors and images, used just as you use them here, in so many poems that they don't have a lot of evocative power or shock value any more, which is the trouble about repeating the best figures of speech to the keenest readers!

    But I am reading it again, and just like jacoberin, I certainly like it and find it entertaining how you refer every line to that rising moon so I just realize it in the last three lines!

    Yes that is fine work.
    | Posted on 2012-07-23 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      but in this case, angry is good...

    i like the arc of the moon like the sword, and the extension of the sword image in the poem...

    not being bitten by the beast but biting the beast...

    the active assertion of loving rather than the passive aggressive resistence or giving in...

    taking the bull by the horns so to speak...

    taking it on faith, and going with it...

    wish this could be done more easily...after the first time of getting pierced by love's blade...it seems harder to attack love with any ferocity..

    but you do it in this poem...and create such a wonderful conflict of images...beauty and the beast sides of love...and a reckless abandon.


    oh those angry ghosts of the past...do not want to see us go after love so readily and with such force.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-07-23 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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