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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/807/391
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Lone within myself, one of one and one of many... I am not myself nor was I ever, I am someone who is not happy, someone who is not set, someone living life every single day in regret...

    I am one of billions but the only one like me
    emotional wreck straight from the beginning
    no one here to understand me

    I feel so much pain, I hide so well
    so much hurt from my family, friends, lovers & for forth
    i don't know how i'm still alive living a life that has no worth

    I once thought I was me, I thought I was happy, I thought that I had everything in control
    wrong as i were, dumb as I were, nothing was ever in my grasp long enough to hold

    for everyone who feels like me, who is completely misunderstood and seems to always be that way, you're right you are misunderstood, you did lose control, you did lose that grip you once called hold...




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      I too have lived my life with a lot of regret. One thing you must do is change this mindset. It truly will get you no where. Believe me I am the pot calling the kettle black here; I dwell in remorse daily, but I've gotten better, I've learned that I absolutely cannot change mistakes but I can control my future choices and that can redeem me... hopefully.
    | Posted on 2012-07-27 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked your poem very much. I think we have all had regrets, been misunderstood, emotions out of control and your right there is no one like us.

    It is ok to loose that grip as long as you hold on to life and what we have been blessed with.

    I can sooo relate to your words, but our lives have worth, we touch people and sometimes don't even realise it. We all have something to give weather we see it or not. So hold on to life and know that there are some who had no choice.
    Take Care Desi....

    | Posted on 2012-07-26 00:00:00 | by Desi | [ Reply to This ]


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