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    dots Submission Name: Noticedots
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    Author: Blue Monk
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    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsNoticedots
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    touch me
    cool and warm
    and blessed be
    the neither norm
    of blue and red
    of royalty

    Madonna one
    or Babalon
    She knows...

    of lessor fame
    is still the same




    Submitted on 2012-07-24 14:57:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This makes my brain hurt!!
    The neither norm of colored royalty?
    Blue bloods bleeding red?
    Sociopathic royalty exploiting our mothers
    by turning them into prostitutes?
    However lesser fame is the same.
    Therefore the singer Madonna is caste
    on the same plane as the working girl
    next door in Gods eyes?

    Hey that is good!
    | Posted on 2012-09-29 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      I didn't make much of reading this because it is the end of my session and I'm out of time. But I read some of your poems sometimes, and like them even when I don't understand some lines. It always seems to be a moment of time for an eternal experience, that you are feeling for?
    | Posted on 2012-07-29 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      the "neither norm" threw me too...

    but i sure like the rest of this...Mothers love their children, famous or not...we equally reserve a mother's heart, always.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-07-24 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      A sweet prayer to Great Mother...
    she's found anywhere and everywhere.

    I especially like the title, as if you're asking the reader to take note.




    It seems you worked faster than you thought you would. Nicely done!


    (But, what is "the neither norm"? I got a bit lost there.)
    | Posted on 2012-07-24 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]


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