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    dots Submission Name: and the pilot is a soul...dots

    Author: caster
    ASL Info:    31.M.MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 136/280/161
    Words: 326
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       about: the title is a quote from a random guru who i saw interviewed once. there is a part including from a famous incident where a plane and pilot disappeared right after this transmission and has never been found. for me this is about contemplating god and the human condition, to put it in the vaguest of terms.

    feedback: i'd like to know how this piece made you feel. please no spelling, grammar, or technical critiques. feedback from the heart, not the head.

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    dotsand the pilot is a soul...dots

    “and the pilot is a soul, covered by another bodily machine”

    and we scream in the dark
    aware it drips of vanity
    but still we cry
    mouths like open graves
    throats torn asunder
    like well-worn sails
    and we play the part so well
    but beg to be more than sunken ships

    and the words i speak are lies
    i am insecure
    and drowning in this mire

    and we stand like shadows
    spines twisted into bows
    feet long given way to roots
    just to steady our course
    faith like anchors
    and we sink
    hearts cold and heavy
    but souls lift and make such a jealous sun

    and the words I speak are lies
    i am insecure
    and drowning in this mire

    19:10:46 DSJ: Delta Sierra Juliet (open microphone for three seconds) It's just vanished.
    FS: Delta Sierra Juliet.
    19:11:00 DSJ: Melbourne, would you know what kind of aircraft I've got? Is it a military aircraft?
    FS: Delta Sierra Juliet, Confirm the - er ~ aircraft just vanished.
    DSJ: Say again.
    FS: Delta Sierra Juliet, is the aircraft still with you?
    DSJ: Delta Sierra Juliet; it's (open microphone for two seconds) now approaching from the south-west.
    FS: Delta Sierra Juliet
    19:11:50 DSJ: Delta Sierra Juliet, the engine is rough-idling. I've got it set at twenty three twenty-four and the thing is (coughing).
    FS: Delta Sierra Juliet, roger, what are your intentions?
    DSJ: My intentions are - ah - to go to King Island - ah - Melbourne. That strange aircraft is hovering on top of me again (open microphone for two seconds). It is hovering and (open microphone for one second) it's not an aircraft.
    FS: Delta Sierra Juliet.
    19:12:28 DSJ: Delta Sierra Juliet. Melbourne (open microphone for seventeen seconds).

    shut up in dirty bones
    holy ghost prison
    waited until god felt alone
    breathed in the atlantic
    unconditional love
    we turned to violence
    laid low a savior
    and we spin

    Submitted on 2012-07-25 11:55:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the song-like quality you have going on in this write.

    "And we stand like shadows
    Spines twisted into bows
    Feet long given way to roots"

    Perfect metaphor, one of my favorite lines.
    | Posted on 2012-07-26 00:00:00 | by dannyshyboy | [ Reply to This ]

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