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    dots Submission Name: The Movementdots
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    Author: sbridges
    ASL Info:    33/F/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 119/119/63
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Nature
    Total Views: 915
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 447



    Description:
       A short thinking session...


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    dotsThe Movementdots
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    The way of the universe, it all flows, equanimity.
    Magic trumps science, in a way, the flashy miracle that no one expected.
    Magic is like death
    Death is like magic
    The skin, to the heart area, to the cell, to the blood, to
    Everything exists ensemble
    And is always changing- crust to core, fast or slow
    Soft, elastic masses
    Toying in different directions
    With unity of essence.




    Submitted on 2012-07-26 13:59:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      deep yet not too long to follow, i really like this piece..keep it flowing
    | Posted on 2012-11-30 00:00:00 | by nosferotu_gurl | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, too weird...i just wrote and posted my space piece..and then read this beautiful poem and found such a parallel to what had been in my mind...
    6th and 7th lines get a big thumbs up...

    "to everything exists ensemble"

    catchy and with such vast meaning...all encompassing line...

    this has what the title indicates...strong movement...

    and concise lines, you don't waste words...i like the tightness of the piece, much.

    and do feel a little twilight zone after doing mine and immediately reading yours right afterwards...or after words...


    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-07-28 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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