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    dots Submission Name: the dreamdots
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    Author: gwenn sundala
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 76/70/51
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
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    dotsthe dreamdots
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    my life seemed so happy. everything was swell.
    i didn't realize how much i really was in hell.
    but then the dream came and took it all away.
    i'm stuck thinking how life would be different today
    if he hadn't broke my heart, if i'd never seen your smile.
    the pain i feel won't go away for a very long while.
    the things before come back to me as now i wish for him.
    but then i see you waiting and feel guilty for this sin.
    all i wanted was to hear you say you'd love me til the end
    and you'd fight him to the death for me, again and again.
    no words from you is what i got, you went to bed to sleep.
    now in the morning i'll be gone; and you won't even weep.
    goodbye cruel world, i bid adieu to this strange family.
    i'm no longer your problem. this ends the curse of me.




    Submitted on 2012-07-28 23:56:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This does not appear to be the dream.

    Is this really a dream or a description of a dream or of a lost love? Or just a random rambling?

    Anyways it was just like a dream .. unfulfilled

    Cheers,
    AbsolutelyLost

    | Posted on 2012-08-01 00:00:00 | by AbsolutelyLost | [ Reply to This ]


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