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    dots Submission Name: Nobody wants to be home on friday nightdots
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    Author: ares_nuke_1
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 106/151/76
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 561
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    Description:
       this is only the first verse followed by the main chorus. I'm still working on verse 2 but just wanted to get thoughts on how it is as it stands


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    dotsNobody wants to be home on friday nightdots
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    The car's gassed up and ready to go
    Jenny's messing with the radio
    We fire it up and hit the streets
    dashboard drumbing to the beats
    We head over to my friend's party
    yeah tonight we're gonna get rowdy
    so pass around the alchohol
    one more time to say screw it all

    'cause nobody wants to be
    home on friday night!

    aint that right!
    there's no cops in sight!

    yeah nobody wants to be
    home on friday night!

    aint that right
    just party till the morning brings the light!




    Submitted on 2012-07-31 22:46:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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