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    dots Submission Name: If I Coulddots
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    Author: johnbegone92
    Elite Ratio:    5.41 - 11/3/3
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsIf I Coulddots
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    If I could, I'd
    Shower her with a summer
    Medley of decadent flowers
    With secret powers
    That'll turn her frown
    Up-side down.
    If I could, I'd drown
    Her in heavanly hibiscus,
    Blossoming blue bells,
    Charming clovers and those
    Sunflowers that she loves
    So much.
    I'd give her a garden
    A meadow
    As a little way to show
    I love her.




    Submitted on 2012-07-31 23:29:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love the light hearted feel of the words and the sincere simplicity of just wanting the best for someone you love dearly. Innocent and charming at the same time.
    | Posted on 2012-08-11 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, theres that structure I love to copy lol this is endearing but a little corny i also think drown is a harsh word for something as light hearted as this. im loving the alliteration but the message is overrated to me. how is love represented with a bunch of casterated plants. but anyways, adorable write!
    | Posted on 2012-07-31 00:00:00 | by simpleandgreen | [ Reply to This ]


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