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    dots Submission Name: Heartstringsdots
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    Author: irrelevantme
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 83/89/62
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 444
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    Description:
       i know i'm bad at this..i really need some help or tips perhaps?.......


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    dotsHeartstringsdots
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    Twilight approaches as leaf by leaf turn hue,
    when night overwhelms soft embers to dark-gray;
    Certain as day follows night,
    dawn yielding to dusk,
    So will my love, though shifts from light to gray and back,
    remain a love: ever true, ever fair
    though time whitens the hair;
    Love will retain its vibrancy;
    color every angle of our two worlds,
    enliven with your every breath;
    Air of my world, my life.




    Submitted on 2012-08-03 09:17:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      vision fades
    as shadow shade
    gathers in lee of westering sun
    my love
    my love
    my only one
    in youth so fair we made pact
    to each the other we stand fast
    now we play that scene
    our final act
    and we breathe our last
    kiss together


    | Posted on 2012-09-15 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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