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    dots Submission Name: Got Brains?dots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsGot Brains?dots
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    Who guards the fatal shock
    When the master
    Of the mausoleum
    Is visiting darker climes
    Who keeps stirred the pot
    Of soylent slime
    Who always
    Helps Morticia unwind

    Moreover
    Tell me who is left-behind
    To feed the vampire dogs
    And walk the necrophilic hogs

    He is
    Humps beyond the ordinary
    With nary a claim on anything mundane
    Certainly he is never one to complain
    Not even when his work is dreary
    As waxing leery into eerie
    He spends the day milking
    Arrow frogs

    With a permanent murkside view
    A mockery of man who has really
    Earned his due

    I say Igor old chap
    This Odes for you












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      I have always enjoyed the characterization of human form that Igor personifies. The subordinate lackey that obviously has visions of being more than his role portends. "Helps Morticia unwind" is a great line, sort of adding a little perhaps sexual tension to his role. "And walk the necrophilic hogs" just kills me, how many times I have wondered at how many totally sexy women have lived, and died, on this planet. The prospects almost make me horny. You've probably made Igor a happy man. Thanks!

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2012-08-04 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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