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    dots Submission Name: the beastdots
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    Author: KindredSpirit
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Burlington Iowa
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 54/139/173
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsthe beastdots
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    Bonded in chains, I accomplish not
    A thing to which would make a difference.
    As a metaphor the meaning
    Is mental ignorance.
    For I acknowledge now my fears
    Of being a mortal man.
    Only once will I live and breathe
    To do right by who I can.
    So trapped am I who relives the past
    As the immorality Burns into my mind.
    The dawning that I am a monster ignites
    As I'm one of millions more you'd find.




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