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    dots Submission Name: Fought Fire with Firedots
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    Author: johnbegone92
    Elite Ratio:    5.41 - 11/3/3
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsFought Fire with Firedots
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    My beautiful baby sister,
    Lies in her own blood,
    Streaked down her arms,
    Dried, caked like mud.
    My beautiful baby sister,
    Finds pain from somewhere,
    So she fought fire with fire,
    She couldn't be stripped bare.
    My beautiful baby sister,
    Cuts as an occupation,
    Tears her skin to shreds,
    Till she found salvation.
    My beautiful baby sister,
    Innocence lost as fourteen,
    She gave up all hope,
    She thought she wasn't clean.
    My beautiful baby sister,
    What can I do?
    The world is cruel and harsh place,
    But big brother is always here for you.




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