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    dots Submission Name: You are my air...dots

    Author: Archer
    ASL Info:    17/female/Oregon
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 118/148/53
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       i wrote this for someone, he'll probably never see it but i wrote it for him anyway, its not the best flow and it might be a song, but i don't have the guts to ask "him" to help me make it so.

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    dotsYou are my air...dots

    Breath in...breath out... breath air...
    Lost within my self , you were so unfair.
    Wandering away, in to nothing
    the air constricts... keeping me at bay
    how did I never see, you pushing me away...

    breath... breath air,
    so cold and silent though I still see you there.
    My tears they strangle,
    But I still breath you,
    your still my air...

    so...break me! Break me down!
    Draw me into your world, pull me to the ground.
    I've forsaken, my heart and i'm numb
    show me the feelings that made me live!

    Suffocating, in your silence,
    I can't breath with out you here!
    I'm losing my mind, and running out of time,
    the end is here, so just breath.

    Breath for me i'll live again,
    Live for me, i'll trust in you!
    Fall again my heart survives,
    remind me again that i'm alive!

    You were my air, the fire in my blood, how cold i've become with out you.

    Submitted on 2012-08-13 21:03:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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