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    dots Submission Name: The Odyssey of Lovedots

    Author: ARoseyTint
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 24/14/5
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Odyssey of Lovedots

    As Prometheus my adulation stands beside you,
    who denied Medusa her look at death.
    Your love, as my passion defies the myths
    and religions after thoughts, their birth.
    Our ship has sailed, beyond the calls of
    witches and demons off Sirens shore.

    Hawaii calls this affection double jeopardy,
    but we never entered this game of devotion,
    for we knew from the start the question
    was a guess of veneration, they exiled.
    When our Red Sails base their
    course on the facts of admiration and sail on.

    We deny the odyssey by Herculean
    strength, a gap widens through each
    our ventricular beat, a journey of promised
    dances beneath Hermes sandals;
    take this fruit, its seeds, its precious
    lies that multiply, defeat Hydra to the last.

    We cherish the ideology, it flourishes into
    dreams, our grace its center we so worship
    heard in simple prayers, a wish, an altar
    of heavenly delights where love whispered
    our names, Poseidonís tears wash away
    our wounds kissed as tested worn gold fleece.

    Zeus, turn your head and seek your
    exalted goddess, your weakness, a love
    you denied with poisoned lips, entrails you
    dared to expose your heart of stone,
    Medusaís child and lay with riches your
    daughter Aretmis avoids the
    wilderness and hunts for this mythical aberration.

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    ||| Comments |||
      I read it and thought it was well put together, pleasing to read in passages and as a whole. I thought the key to it (as well as the great hindrance) was that it was made up of historical / mythological ingredients and therefore you have to know a bit about that stuff to get a real taste for the words.

    I don't (know a lot about that stuff).

    Another point of interest to me was that I couldn't tell it was written by two different writers.

    Please don't feel as if you now have to reciprocate, as Bruce said, it is probably better to push down on some keys for a few minutes rather than let it go by and be missed.
    | Posted on 2012-08-20 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow what a review Thank you.
    | Posted on 2012-08-16 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      This is definitely something new for you. The wisdoms it espouses, though heavily cloaked in analogies and metaphors from ancient Greece, are poignant and puissant. I think the first verse is my favorite: "Your love, as my passion defies the myths
    and religions after thoughts, their birth.
    Our ship has sailed, beyond the calls of
    witches and demons off Sirens shore."
    is positively stellar. However,
    "When our Red Sails base their
    course on the facts of admiration and sail on."
    definitely runs a close second. I can hardly say enough. Each verse exposes a new and primal aspect of love that so many have missed. I like the way, in the last verse, that you have so justifiably critiqued Zeus's fidelities, an argument I have long had with the essence of Greek mythology as a religion. In conclusion, this is very good, a definite fave.

    | Posted on 2012-08-16 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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