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    dots Submission Name: Whisper Lustdots
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    Author: MmR
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    And the demon whispered..

    Let me light the candle
    And within the flicker of your flames
    We'll see what starts to rise.
    I'll love you until you ache to glisten
    And the inhibition escapes your eyes...

    Let me caress your desire
    And within the arch of every curve
    We'll hear the heaven cry.
    I'll love you until you beg to shutter
    And your heavy breath goes dry.

    And then my demon whispered..

    Let me watch you slither
    And within the spark of our embrace
    We'll taste your peach and pearl and cream.
    I'll love you until you close your eyes
    And start to pray I was merely just a dream...







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      The nightsweats come in vision of barbaric Amazons
    Far from holy desires ignite the marrow of my bone
    O immortal warriors that come disturb my rest
    You are my desire quivering up to mock repose
    On an ever undulating rise to a stiffer pose

    I can not by cunning verse nor crystal rhyme
    Find redemption on this mortal plane
    Indeed I have profaned the name of love
    But in the night the Amazons come
    | Posted on 2012-09-08 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      "I'll love you until you beg to shutter
    And your heavy breath goes dry"

    wow. Got me really nice in that line, it's very compelling... who needs real sexytime...when you can read it...
    | Posted on 2012-09-04 00:00:00 | by KeeperOfLight | [ Reply to This ]
      a very sexy, tempting love song...

    like saying..i'm bad for you, but i love you and want to love you and want you to love me...even if i may be detrimental to your emotional well being...

    lots of good phrasing in this.
    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-08-16 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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