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    dots Submission Name: Conversiondots

    Author: irrelevantme
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 83/89/62
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    A phoenix rummages through the sky,
    filled with the radiance of youth;
    hurling swiftly: days to years
    Days go by unknowingly to a child

    So solemn the night, lovers pander away,
    as a lone eye stares at a dull moon;
    Waning in its clarity, gleaming through the fog;
    Searching, seeking, for a dear friend: the sun

    Forever to be sought, hover 'round the earth;
    time flies along with them:
    day to day, season to season,
    a constant coherence of change

    Eternity began at the blink of an eye,
    slowly withering at each close
    'til youth turns to ashes,
    and ashes fill the earth

    Submitted on 2012-08-17 10:13:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a really good use of the phoenix.
    I like reading you it is fun and inspiring.
    Also you (almost) always make
    me change my mood for at least
    the time it takes to experience
    your words. I love that!
    | Posted on 2012-09-07 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]

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