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    dots Submission Name: Little Girl Worlddots

    Author: Mud
    ASL Info:    18/f/India
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 55/98/57
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I am scared of old age. My grandmother is not doing well today, but at some point she was young and asked so many questions. It was easy to be impatient with her. I like to revisit my childhood and imagine hers was very different. This could be about anything.

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    dotsLittle Girl Worlddots

    Summer birds
    Sound the same when
    You are three
    As when you are three hundred

    When i was a child
    I spent a lot of time with cats
    And kitten
    After kitten
    After kitten
    Purred on my chest

    Still and always purring
    In my chest

    Tin can telephone
    To talk to that imaginary friend
    In the mirror
    You are my worst friend
    Donít copy me

    Cherry blossoms fill
    A screen somewhere
    A cat sweetly catches a petal
    Before mauling a lizard
    I scream

    I scream to Foxy and Owly and Bear and Bozo and Barbie
    Toys convene
    And break into synthetic

    Suddenly I am old
    Dolphins are dying in a documentary

    I have more ghosts to bust

    And suddenly I cannot breathe

    Somebody should pull
    That plug

    And release the little girl
    With wondrous question
    And curiousity
    Back into a placeo

    Where someone will answer
    Little embryo
    I am as old as stardust
    And light and air between us
    Is ancient
    But I will always have time
    For you

    I am sorry
    I didnít try hard enough
    Little girl

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      "more ghosts to bust"

    yes, grandmother who once was a little girl...and the speaker in the poem is now the little girl who one day will be the grandmother...asking the same questions over and over, just as a child would.

    i like the progression of this poem...i like the juxtaposition of childhood and old age...and how similar it shows they are ...when it comes down to it...

    there is a haunting spirit to this...it transcends the words...

    and appropriate to what i was thinking earlier tonight...that i hope my existence will make some difference...i hope there is a reason to be here.
    otherwise i want to go back into the womb...and never have come out.

    | Posted on 2012-08-17 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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