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Sailing Through


Author: BlazeFlamme
ASL Info:    22/m/TX
Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23 /161 /138
Words: 177
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Been on the water for 2 months, now (minus 8 days in france and greece). Several more to go... miss my wife.


Sailing Through



I felt the sun kiss the waters
Once again last night
And though naught was seen
Through my homesick dreams
I know you felt it too

And I almost wouldn't bother
Catching up on sleep
Though my world may rock and sway
And I'm thousands of miles away
At night I escape to you

But the sky's dearest lover
Soon rises high
When all the darkness fades
Reality succumbed from day
Where forever feels a humble thing

Because the distance is far too far
Creeping clock's big hand
It teases and runs at night
Just to skulk in broad daylight
While my heart lies next to you

And sometimes I want to scream
Give in to whatever fate
But helpless times brood feebleness
An empty array of different ways
To hurry home to you

So my soul may ache for now
My body beaten down
Callus, blister, cramp and stitch
The only way to cross that bridge
Is to face daylight, drudge through
Until my ship sails home, back to you.




Submitted on 2012-08-17 13:37:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  "where forever feels like a humble thing"

really like that line...this is so touching..forlorn, yet hopeful the next wave will bring me back to my love...

i am in a long distance relationship..and really felt this...it punctuates the feeling so well..

sounds a bit like Poe

"Helen, thy beauty is to me, like those Nicean barks of yore, that gently oer a perfume sea, the weary wayworn wanderer bore, to his own native shore"

nice

jacob
| Posted on 2012-08-17 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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