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    dots Submission Name: Sailing Throughdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 497
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       Been on the water for 2 months, now (minus 8 days in france and greece). Several more to go... miss my wife.


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    dotsSailing Throughdots
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    I felt the sun kiss the waters
    Once again last night
    And though naught was seen
    Through my homesick dreams
    I know you felt it too

    And I almost wouldn't bother
    Catching up on sleep
    Though my world may rock and sway
    And I'm thousands of miles away
    At night I escape to you

    But the sky's dearest lover
    Soon rises high
    When all the darkness fades
    Reality succumbed from day
    Where forever feels a humble thing

    Because the distance is far too far
    Creeping clock's big hand
    It teases and runs at night
    Just to skulk in broad daylight
    While my heart lies next to you

    And sometimes I want to scream
    Give in to whatever fate
    But helpless times brood feebleness
    An empty array of different ways
    To hurry home to you

    So my soul may ache for now
    My body beaten down
    Callus, blister, cramp and stitch
    The only way to cross that bridge
    Is to face daylight, drudge through
    Until my ship sails home, back to you.




    Submitted on 2012-08-17 13:37:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "where forever feels like a humble thing"

    really like that line...this is so touching..forlorn, yet hopeful the next wave will bring me back to my love...

    i am in a long distance relationship..and really felt this...it punctuates the feeling so well..

    sounds a bit like Poe

    "Helen, thy beauty is to me, like those Nicean barks of yore, that gently oer a perfume sea, the weary wayworn wanderer bore, to his own native shore"

    nice

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-08-17 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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