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Exhausted trees are shedding leaves,
The grass is painted languid yellow,
My shadow stretches, slipping
In between the cracks
Submitted on 2012-08-18 17:41:36
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Wow! I really like this too, I am also writing these type of minimalistic poems. It seems our works are similar in some aspects. I'm gonna read more of your stuff and comment on it. I hope you don't mind...
| Posted on 2012-09-16 00:00:00 | by
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it's autumn, and i am falling into the crack between summer and fall...
the shadow does stretch in fall...in more ways than one...aging, the seasons changing...
we cause a bigger shadow towards the end of our lives...
i really like the idea of "exhausted trees"
yes, they must get tired shedding and then growing new leaves and then shedding again.
i think we get tired by our autumn...life wears us down...
but there is splendid color in fall...and hopefully our lives are colorful and the colors even brighter at the end...
| Posted on 2012-08-19 00:00:00 | by
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