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    dots Submission Name: Timedots

    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 136/243/156
    Words: 21
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Exhausted trees are shedding leaves,
    The grass is painted languid yellow,
    My shadow stretches, slipping
    In between the cracks
    A moment.

    Submitted on 2012-08-18 17:41:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow! I really like this too, I am also writing these type of minimalistic poems. It seems our works are similar in some aspects. I'm gonna read more of your stuff and comment on it. I hope you don't mind...
    | Posted on 2012-09-16 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      it's autumn, and i am falling into the crack between summer and fall...

    the shadow does stretch in fall...in more ways than one...aging, the seasons changing...

    we cause a bigger shadow towards the end of our lives...

    i really like the idea of "exhausted trees"

    yes, they must get tired shedding and then growing new leaves and then shedding again.

    i think we get tired by our autumn...life wears us down...

    but there is splendid color in fall...and hopefully our lives are colorful and the colors even brighter at the end...

    | Posted on 2012-08-19 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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