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    dots Submission Name: Timedots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 137/243/158
    Words: 21
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTimedots
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    Exhausted trees are shedding leaves,
    The grass is painted languid yellow,
    My shadow stretches, slipping
    In between the cracks
    A moment.




    Submitted on 2012-08-18 17:41:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow! I really like this too, I am also writing these type of minimalistic poems. It seems our works are similar in some aspects. I'm gonna read more of your stuff and comment on it. I hope you don't mind...
    | Posted on 2012-09-16 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      it's autumn, and i am falling into the crack between summer and fall...

    the shadow does stretch in fall...in more ways than one...aging, the seasons changing...

    we cause a bigger shadow towards the end of our lives...

    i really like the idea of "exhausted trees"

    yes, they must get tired shedding and then growing new leaves and then shedding again.

    i think we get tired by our autumn...life wears us down...

    but there is splendid color in fall...and hopefully our lives are colorful and the colors even brighter at the end...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-08-19 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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