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    dots Submission Name: Vintage Lovedots
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    Author: ladydeathstrike
    ASL Info:    27/F/Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    5.27 - 259/284/94
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsVintage Lovedots
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    Slow dance with me in our imaginary kitchen,
    let the yellow walls bathe us in light,
    ah, that morning bliss.

    I swim in a blur of color as I'm twirled by your arms,
    and you catch me when I don't fall.

    Ruffle my skirt while I sing to you... naughtily.
    with a wooden spoon,
    and playfully push you into,
    the chair you always use.

    A coquettish kiss...
    A playful smile...

    These walls, the audience for our play of life.
    These floors to support our heavy hearts,
    full of love and frustration,
    alive and wanting,
    yearning for...
    us to touch.

    These things that come alive when we fall,
    Take me back to a vintage kind of love.







    Submitted on 2012-08-19 21:50:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I never knew or would have guessed even that Ladydeathstike writes love poems and good ones too. Now I am going to have to read more of you and see if there are any ideas I can peculate.
    | Posted on 2012-11-15 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good. A couple of grammatical errors but amazing none the less.
    | Posted on 2012-08-23 00:00:00 | by blackdemigod13 | [ Reply to This ]


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