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    dots Submission Name: Nocturnal greetings . . .dots

    Author: irrelevantme
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 83/89/62
    Words: 25
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsNocturnal greetings . . .dots

    Closing eyes,
    stifled yawns;
    drifting mind,
    weary soul;
    soft bed,
    dim lights;
    a warm hug,
    a soft kiss,
    tonight as we say,
    good night

    Submitted on 2012-08-20 10:40:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was really well-crafted brevity. I loved the title and how you tied in that whole theme of it being nighttime....I believe night can be very haunting sometimes and there is that whole thought of being alone but here, you don't make it seem like things are ending or are bittersweet. The night seems pleasant, and restful. I love the feel of "drifting" and how you really brought about peace of mind here in such few words. Neat short write, I got a lot out of it.
    | Posted on 2012-08-27 00:00:00 | by unknownguest | [ Reply to This ]

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