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    dots Submission Name: Blue Dark, Dark Bluedots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsBlue Dark, Dark Bluedots
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    As children we called twilight "blue dark".
    The sky is never as lovely as then,
    like you and I it strives
    inked in indigo,
    never blue enough--just blue.
    Daylight receding,
    night waiting on the stoop.
    Oh, how long ago it seems
    living only in memories, old photographs
    And echoes of mother calling us inside
    for a supper already cold.
    Oh, deep sky
    lit with faint, distant embers;
    help me,
    it's getting dark,
    and I'm growing a deeper blue.





    Submitted on 2004-02-16 04:11:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I feel I want to cry, but I'm not sure I understand why. Memories are stirred, and the sense of loss is very nearly palpable. Fave's list for certain. <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-22 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      You did it again! Such simple words, but the universally experienced images, and your mesmerizing meter, draw one in and the nostalgia, even that touch of blue.. wash over the reader ,sharing that moment with you. Very Good write Amy. Silver
    | Posted on 2004-02-17 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]


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