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    dots Submission Name: Well I'll Bedots
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    Author: EEKS
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    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsWell I'll Bedots
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    I'll be the pot if you'll be the kettle
    and I'll be the plastic if you'll be the metal
    You'll be strong and I'll be common
    I will be so easy to find but you will be more practical... for buildings and things

    And you be the witch and I'll be the ghost
    and I'll be the least but only if you'll be the most
    I'll be the branch if you'll be the switch
    and you can be whore if I can be the bitch

    You can be light and I'll be dark
    I'll be the happy ending if you'll be the bitter start
    and I'll be the lungs and you be the heart
    and you beat like a drum and you keep me going on and on and on and on

    I'll be the coffee and you be the dream,
    and I'll be the sleep because you have to be the dream
    and you can carry me to the bottom of the sea
    on your back, with your hand on my knee

    and at the end of the world,
    I'll be the calm and you'll be the storm
    and you'll beat like a drum
    and you'll keep me going on and on and on and on and on and on




    Submitted on 2012-08-21 18:23:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      there is so much contradictions that I was a little bit lost. sometimes simplicity is the key to having a great flow in words.
    | Posted on 2012-08-23 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]


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