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    dots Submission Name: Stormdots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 647/1206/773
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    You can call it a storm
    when I know its only raining
    because the trees are shaking
    but I know better

    And I won't think anything of you now,
    telling lies and begging for the wrong things
    because I knew you when you were fearless,
    I knew you when you knew everything

    So you can call me the worst
    but I know you're just cursed,
    you've been hit too hard
    and the cut won't scar

    You've been waiting for a rain
    that never seems to fall
    but I don't think of you that way
    I remember when you were strong

    And thats what I'm thinking
    When my eyes lose their focus,
    about how strong you were
    when I was too weak to notice




    Submitted on 2012-08-21 18:24:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this. I don't know who you addressed it to but it's something that fits perfectly to America as a whole and the current stand that culture has reached. :) Read it that way and I think you'll agree with me. Anyway good writing!
    | Posted on 2012-09-15 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the ending..the rest seems to need a little something to balance it with the impact of the last part but that just what I think..I can also relate to this coz i've seen people close to me lose themselves because being hurt..nice
    | Posted on 2012-08-28 00:00:00 | by irrelevantme | [ Reply to This ]


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