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    dots Submission Name: alwaysdots
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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    if we could be lovebirds in a cage enclosed but free
    we shall not miss flying distances, these inches we have suffice
    and the mourning of what could have been will pass subtly
    no reason shall abrupt where our thoughts are poured in
    no amount of noise could disrupt this wanted peace
    in this little space we left ourselves.

    they could try to break us, yes they may can
    but you told me you'll love me anyway near or apart
    I always believe you,
    in early mornings I would slip a thought under the pillow to think in the evening...
    and we have put our plans in a suitcase whenever we have to go away...
    I always thought of leaving this world with you,
    death is just a flick of reality for us, a thought

    Fate against faith is all we have left,
    No resurrection could claim the time we have lost,
    but there's no excuse for letting you go now
    I have loved you long enough,it's even immeasurable
    we could walk away with the path that life brings
    or we could take the one we thought we could dare to..
    either way I'll break every walls and bend rules to conform with the love we once set upon.




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      I feel like there is quite a bittersweet feel to this
    I really like it te
    I am really curious though, if you don't mind, who is your inspiration with this?
    | Posted on 2013-03-26 00:00:00 | by irrelevantme | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is so lovely and heartfelt I literally
    become bemused as I peruse its intricacies.
    I have a special place in my heart where I keep this poem.

    I know it is not mine yet I can wish I did posses
    such a poem for my own.

    And yet as luscious as this poem is two lines stand
    out for me above all the others.

    "in the early mornings I would slip a thought under the pillow to think in the evening

    and we have put our plans in a suitcase whenever we have to go away"

    To me this means you think of your love even and
    always when you are dreaming, and make a point
    of remembering to sleep always with love. Then of course
    no matter what you do or where you go you take this
    love with you holding it dear.

    I do so love this poem it makes me happy and sad at
    the same time it is so lovely and yet will never truly be
    mine.
    | Posted on 2012-09-29 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      the more they tear us apart, the more caged we feel without each other...the stronger the love...and it will win out in the end...no matter what...i will be with you...even against my better judgement...i am there...

    i like "no resurrection can claim the time we lost"
    good stuff...

    "in this little space we left ourselves"

    another really pertinent and true line...


    i like your work..

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-08-23 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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