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    dots Submission Name: wrecked my eardots
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    Author: pioneerheart
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 204/205/140
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I want to know how to pray


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    dotswrecked my eardots
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    In the tide
    There you go
    The life you knew
    In undertow
    You slowly elevated
    Down

    The pressure lifts us up again
    The sun is red
    Alive

    That's all anyone wants to feel
    Just to make sure that this is real
    And dreams denote unknown whimsical traces
    That leave the confusion fresh in their places

    Nightshade pillow mellow down
    Keep my fierce focus underground
    Decipher and see through fresh, wonder

    Not deadened, desensitized, slowly decayed
    Translate exactly what you wished you'd say
    Through dreams, through life, in shadowed fear
    Took a chance, wrecked my ear




    Submitted on 2012-08-25 05:27:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the sound of this it has me feeling like a leaf on a lake of pellucid water. However as I drift by vagrant breeze I wonder
    if this wrecked ear thing is connected to your blog?
    | Posted on 2012-08-25 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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