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    dots Submission Name: Cycledots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsCycledots
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    Eventually I'll get the idea
    That broken hearts
    Aren't suppose to be a criteria
    Categorize it as part
    Of a dying bacteria.

    I've known the hearts of men
    Who will give you their hand
    Turn around
    Stab you in the back
    Yet he called himself your friend.

    I know women
    Who say they will
    Stay until the end
    But when that happens
    She'll be saying it
    To the other ten.

    I picture life gave me
    The right to,
    Continue in these steps
    Never to fall back
    On the same cycle.






    Submitted on 2012-08-25 12:25:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey! All this comes from a wrong idea, a deluded idea that some people have: that someone else is responsible for your own life. I never thought like that. To me human beings are completely different, each life is an original and personal experience and each person is completely responsible for it. You can call that egoism but you'd be wrong. I respect each life stream on this planet and each person has it's own decisions to make and thousands upon thousands of moments to enjoy. I see in the end of the poem that you're slowly coming to the same conclusions as I have...
    | Posted on 2012-09-15 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      I picture life gave me
    The right to,
    Continue in these steps
    Never to fall back
    On the same cycle.

    these lines are so great I read it again... I can truly relate to this, we just have to learn from life and never commit the same mistakes.
    nice one

    jen
    | Posted on 2012-08-25 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]


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