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    Author: crashley
    Elite Ratio:    0.43 - 3/26/100
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I girl in Seattle holds my heart

    Small hands,
    big eyes,
    much love,
    and everything that is mine.

    turn on.
    happy heart light.
    undiminished and
    impossibly bright

    i grin at her
    and kiss her lips
    she smiles again
    and we greet the day.




    Submitted on 2012-08-27 01:02:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the second stanza a lot and enjoyed reading this but how wish this was longer. The first line is striking so I hope there's a little expansion of that. Thanks for sgaring this..

    Jen
    | Posted on 2012-08-27 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]


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